For this paper at first I didn’t get that much feedback from my peers comments but when discussing the paper in class i got a ton of ideas on how I could elaborate. For my paragraph where it talks about peoples identities being masked i need to expand my thoughts more or even so, do a better job at explaining what I’m trying to get at. It might help for me to re read my writing out loud. I definitely need to refocus and reword my thesis. Since I really liked the idea of talking about bandwagons I got feedback on that and it was suggested to move it forward in my piece and connect it with cyberbullying. I also realized that I don’t have a conclusion for my essay so i need to make sure I write one. And lastly I need to read my whole paper out loud so i can fix any grammatical errors that I will still have and my peers didn’t pick up on.
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